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14 April 2006 @ 02:52 pm
Fic: 2: Muffin  
So I was eating a muffin and…

Title: 02: Muffin (Word provided by [info]vaysh)
Author: BeccaAmon
Genre: AU
Pairings: Sasuke&Naruto
Disclaimer: Standard disclaimers apply.
AN: Unbeta-ed, Naruto pov


Muffin

He was the quiet guy in our class, Uchiha Sasuke. The smartest one around, but not the most popular. Well, that’s not quite true, he was popular, but I don't think he liked it. He prefered to be alone, he didn’t talk much, and all attempts to talk to him were met with a warning glare or insular silence. I didn't know him, just of him. We went to the same elementary school, and then I transferred to another school in the middle of fifth grade. He was the last person on my mind. Because back then it was the same, I had my own sphere of solitude, and he had his. Funny we never collided spheres and met. Nope, just kept to ourselves. Anyways, when graduation came around and it was time to choose a high school, I picked one, and there he was. His hair was the same black that appeared blue in the sunlight, proud chin turned from the group, and his narrow and silent eyes looking to some distance I couldn’t guess how far.

In highschool, nothing changed. Well, not exactly. I actually had friends, and surprisingly he had some too. I’ve never really thought about it, but now, if I think back, I remember my eyes following him whenever he entered the cafeteria, and then he would find his friends, and they’ll talk around him. He’d talk too, but not much. I’d always thought he was shy or something, but I found out that being quiet didn’t mean being shy.

One day, some idiot decided he couldn’t take it anymore, his girlfriend always making puppy dog eyes at Sasuke. The guy left his seat and headed toward Sasuke, all the while mouthing off and asking anyone who would hear it, what was so good about Sasuke. When he got close enough, he grabbed Sasuke’s shoulder, josling his arm and sending the muffin he had been eating bouncing off the table, and to the floor. The guy didn’t see it coming, we didn’t see it coming. Sasuke turned from his seat, stood up, and planted his fist into the guy’s face. I thought the idiot was going to go flying, but no, he just dropped to the floor, and screamed holding his face. All jaws must have dropped at that moment, and all eyes and ears turned toward him. Sasuke just looked down at the guy, sneered at him, and kicked him out of the way. That day, I discovered that Sasuke wasn’t some shy guy; he was arrogant, strong, and didn’t give a shit. The show being over, I got up to buy something before the lunch lady decided to close shop. Everything else was sold or looked inedible so I made a grab for the last muffin. Wouldn’t you know it, the same time I was aiming for that sucker, Sasuke had been too. Our hands collided, and the muffin must have been scared shitless.

“Hey, sorry,” I had said. I remember it, because it was probably the only time we spoke to each other.

“Whatever,” he shrugged, grabbed the muffin, and left. Bastard.

So, yeah, not a very good memory. But it stayed with me somehow. I still remember that brief warmth his body gave off, standing that close, and I remember his knuckles, red from hitting that guy’s face. And then there was that one rainy day. I had been waiting for the bus and I saw him, standing in the rain, his face to the polluted sky, and looking like he didn’t give a shit about getting sick. There was something about his wet figure that I couldn’t find a word to describe.

Then, graduation day rolled around and he got top scores and I barely graduated. Everyone was taking pictures, signing yearbooks, and giving empty promises of being friends forever and keeping in touch. Sasuke, well, he said his goodbyes to the people that had sat with him all those highschool years, he got dragged into pictures, but there wasn’t anyone there taking pictures of him. No one showered him with praises. He didn’t have a family patting him on the back and saying “good job”. No one. And as he separated from the crowd and walked out of the school gates, I found that word to describe him; he was alone, that’s what he was.

I didn’t see him again after that. I got a summer job, and worked my ass off to earn money and pay my rent. I got into some community college and that was good enough for me. And wouldn’t you know it, I walked into my first class and there he was sitting in a desk like he belonged there. I had thought he would be in some university or finding a cure for cancer or something, but, well whatever right?

So it’s my second term in college and I’m not doing that bad. Sasuke? He’s right there picking at his muffin like it had done something wrong to him. He’s getting up from his seat, collecting his things and I braced myself. It’s now or never. He has his back turned to me and I start walking, fast. A step away, I raise my arms and hug him from behind. I pulled him to me and I heard his gasp, felt it. I buried my face into his hair, and said “Hey.”

I felt his body stiffening, he was collecting his scattered senses, and I let go. I drew back and let him turn fully, and take a good look at who just violated his sphere. I could pratically feel the target circle on my face, but when he saw me, he froze, I think. And losing my nerve, I high-tailed it out of there. Zoom.

I found some isolated park in the campus and laughed the nervousness out of my system, like fucking laughed my lungs out. I don’t know what compelled me to do something idiotic like that. Who the hell hugs a guy out of nowhere? But I had to do it. It was one of those freaky things you couldn’t explain. See? I realized just a week ago that he’s gotten inside me somehow. It was back then, that time with the muffin. Or maybe it was when I left fifth grade, looking back and not knowing what I was looking for or who. Or maybe it had been during first grade, when we had a scuffle at the school yard, because he kicked at my sand fort. I don’t know why or how, but he’s in me deep. Hugging him, I don’t know what it accomplished, and aw shit, I have to see him tomorrow. I laughed some more.

The next day, as I sat wringing my brain over an essay thesis, a muffin planted itself in front of me. I looked up, and Sasuke was smirking down like I was the muffin. He pulled the chair back, the one across from me, and sat down.

“Uhh…” I said intelligently.

“Who the hell hugs a guy from behind? You suicidal?” he asked, arms crossed and eyebrow raised.

“Only before my morning coffee.” I grinned, and he grinned right back…ern, smirked? In a predatory way…aw, shit.

~End


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[info]vayshMuffin
[info]sintariBrief is life but love is long.
[info]empyreal_rainCHILDHOOD FRIENDS
[info]kittychan86comfort
[info]questofdreamscaricature
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[info]dani3lrspaghetti
[info]istealboyswings
"I wish I smoked."
"Why?"
"So I would know what to do with my hands..."
[info]kasu0236
Life had always been tough as an orphan, but somehow he had
always managed to get by.
[info]dwessa
"And it hurts my mind to think of
all the stupid things I said;
and if I can change the future,
I would change the past instead"
--Danny Elfman

 
 
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kae[info]empyreal_rain on April 14th, 2006 01:30 pm (UTC)
SQUUUUUUUUEE!! OH MY GOSHH THE CUTENESS!!
i loved this:
That day, I discovered that Sasuke wasn’t some shy guy; he was arrogant, strong, and didn’t give a shit.

WAH! perfect i say! XD I LOVES YOU TENSAI!

mufffffffin!!

I couldn't stop laughing

When he got close enough, he grabbed Sasuke’s shoulder, josling his arm and sending the muffin he had been eating bouncing off the table, and to the floor.

Just imagin the muffin dropping... THE END OF THE WORLD XD;;;

and alsooooooo i love this too!! I can see it soo clearly:
I had been waiting for the bus and I saw him, standing in the rain, his face to the polluted sky,

I can draw it x_x!! If only i didn't have my finals x_x!

*huggles becca!! ~ thank you for the fresh air! *back to studying*

OHO OH !! before i hit the comment button:
the muffin must have been scared shitless.

AHAHAHAHAHAHAH... i really can't stop laughing.
kae[info]empyreal_rain on April 14th, 2006 01:48 pm (UTC)
Hugging him, I don’t know what it accomplished,

It popped your bubble sphere! COLLIDED your worlds! Broke THEE ice!

that's what it did XD;;
(no subject) - [info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 04:19 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 04:19 pm (UTC)
ayonoi: kisamehugsand kisses by ushitora_icons[info]ayonoi on April 14th, 2006 01:41 pm (UTC)
lol, that was really, really nice. I think the "muffin being scared shitless" was my favorite line. I guess you can say I am a sucker for Naruto's POV writing. I think you did a really good job with his character and Sasuke's too.

Much love for Naruto being looked at like a muffin XD (now you know what Sasuke will be calling him at home, in bed!)
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 04:18 pm (UTC)
*cough* Actually, I had written something for this word already, months ago. And it involve a morning make-out session and Sasuke calling Naruto "muffin". I liked it, the making-out mostly..but this is better I think. XD
(no subject) - [info]empyreal_rain on April 14th, 2006 05:37 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:09 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [info]empyreal_rain on April 15th, 2006 11:09 am (UTC)
ayonoi: abenoseimei orly? by herchuckness[info]ayonoi on April 14th, 2006 01:42 pm (UTC)
and before I forget
oh and I feel sad I missed giving you a word :(
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 04:13 pm (UTC)
Re: and before I forget
Aw, don't feel bad, give me a word and we'll forget about it. ^_~ XD
questofdreams[info]questofdreams on April 14th, 2006 01:58 pm (UTC)
THE END?!!!? NOOOOO!!!

That was so great. Even if dialogue was scarce, it wasn't even needed. Ahh..how I've missed your writing, heehe. *puppy dog eyes* Is that really it? hehe
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 04:12 pm (UTC)
Well..I don't know. There's always the possibility of me eating another muffin...or something. XD

Thank you.
[info]mynullnostalgia on April 14th, 2006 02:25 pm (UTC)
ah, your oneshots have always been beautiful to me. although there isnt much actions happening, i can easily define romance and quiet meanings of two people being pulled together between your descriptive words. i hope you still continue, ill always look forward to your fanfics.
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 04:11 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! *sparkles* Hehe, those two just bring out the sap in me. XD
(no subject) - [info]mynullnostalgia on April 14th, 2006 06:41 pm (UTC)
Gloomy_Gloo: Shiny Eyes[info]gloomy_gloo on April 14th, 2006 03:41 pm (UTC)
Omg, that was so cute! I want more, more! You're seriously my hero..err..heroine ^^;; I absolutely love all your stories ;*
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 03:54 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I'm actually rather fond of this one XD
Alli: snow[info]talking_pies on April 14th, 2006 03:51 pm (UTC)
...well wow.

That's about all I can say without repeating what others say but... yeah, wow.

Would you mind terribly if I friended you? Not on this journal, because this is solely for posting my fanfiction, but on my actual journal? (Sorry for not commenting with it, I'm feeling lazy :P)
Becca Amon: SasuNaru[info]spiralfall on April 14th, 2006 03:54 pm (UTC)
*laughs* Thank you, and yes, friend away. :)
(no subject) - [info]alli_chan on April 14th, 2006 06:44 pm (UTC)
Sintari[info]sintari on April 14th, 2006 05:12 pm (UTC)
Oooooh! This is a bit of a departure for you and it's fabulous! I don't recall ever reading first person from you. You had Naruto's voice down so well! I could totally imagine him as a community-college-going, street tough kind of guy. You're use of diction -- his cussing, the way he formed his sentences, totally sold me. And I loved Sasuke -- looking at Naruto like he was the muffin. Hee!
Becca Amon: Sliding doors[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:08 am (UTC)
*snickers* You kill me! Thank you for reading my fluff. ^_~
youji_yola[info]youji_yola on April 14th, 2006 05:41 pm (UTC)
God, it's so romantic that it makes me want to sigh and make the |D face while staring at the computer. You got Naruto's personality perfectly, Sasuke's snarkiness is awesome too.

I had been waiting for the bus and I saw him, standing in the rain, his face to the polluted sky, and looking like he didn’t give a shit about getting sick. There was something about his wet figure that I couldn’t find a word to describe.

That mental image reminds me of the Valley of the End arc when Sasuke's staring at the sky, with a blank look on his face. T-T
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:07 am (UTC)
Thank you ^~^, like I had mentioned before, I have a particular fondness for this one, probably because of what you mentioned, and well..gods they're just so cute aren't they? XD

That mental image reminds me of the Valley of the End arc when Sasuke's staring at the sky, with a blank look on his face.

*nodnod!* I hadn't realized that until I had read it for the third time (looking for typos). Hehe, funny how those images stick with you I guess.
gonrie[info]gonrie on April 14th, 2006 05:48 pm (UTC)
Um...wanted to know if you could do a request? I mean...I absolutely love all your fics and...just wanted to know if you could write me a one-shot?:P

If you can... I'd like a 6 year old naruto meeting an older 6 year old sasuke on school and something about the beginning of a crush....
It's doesn't have to be that...anyway..

Well...just tell if you can. I'll be waiting your whatever you'll be answering:P
Becca Amon: SasuNaru-Love is...[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:04 am (UTC)
Hehe, I don't usually accept requests, simply because I don't know if I could actually come up with something for it. But I will give it a try. The requests is broad enough, somethings bound to poke me, right? :D I'll try, alright? ^_~
[info]azamaria_chan on April 14th, 2006 07:20 pm (UTC)
How you managed to figure a way incorporate a muffin in that well, I'll never know. Mhmm. *grins* I like this. It's sweet and tasty. :)
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:02 am (UTC)
I don't know how I managed that as well. XD It just plopped itself right in the middle and demanded to be teh star. :D Thank you for reading.
carolyn[info]oilysheep on April 14th, 2006 07:45 pm (UTC)
aw i really liked this! so cute :) thanks for writing, it's good as always!
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:01 am (UTC)
Thank you! *loves on your icon* It's so airy *pokes it* Glad you liked :D
Wisty[info]ylmik_wisty on April 14th, 2006 07:46 pm (UTC)
Eee- good ficlets!! I've read your "Spiral Falling" too on aff.net. You're a very good writer. :)
Becca Amon: SasuNaru-Love is...[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:00 am (UTC)
Thank you ^~^ Ah SF, how I miss it.
sohma-kun: fai[info]ureihitomi on April 14th, 2006 07:52 pm (UTC)
ohhhh, that was so cute!!!! as is comfort. i really miss your fics. super thanks for sharing.
Becca Amon: SasuNaru-Love is...[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 09:00 am (UTC)
super thanks for reading ^_~
&pseudoearthling.: [anime] - [itachi poke][info]theubaz on April 15th, 2006 08:36 am (UTC)
Homg :D
I remembered reading your fics when they were on AFF.net, but then AFF.net went poof. ;-; This is so cool! I found you! (Not in the stalker way though, just saw this posted in a SasuxNaru community) ...hope you don't mind that I added you, heh heh ^+^

So! Awesome work like always!
Your writing style always inspires me to write more, it's just that awesome :D I like muffins too - wish there was a Sasuke in real life I could meet at a muffin shop, that'd be hawt. *dreeeeeamy sigh*


oh, by the way - your last sentence: preditory -> predatory
(sorry, couldn't resist, don't be angry? lol D:)
Becca Amon: SasuNaru[info]spiralfall on April 15th, 2006 08:59 am (UTC)
Thank you! Fixed it. I swear those typos are elusive. :D And please add away, I don't mind. ^~^

Mmmm, Sasuke in a muffin shop? And will Naruto be purchasing his daily muffin as an excuse to see him? :D or will they be working together? *pokes your muses* hehe.
(no subject) - [info]theubaz on April 15th, 2006 09:15 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [info]theubaz on April 23rd, 2006 06:26 pm (UTC)
ksadjksla: Poor Gaara[info]refusing on April 15th, 2006 11:15 am (UTC)
I love your oneshots! Rofl, Muffin love! <333333333
ly_mizukage[info]ly_mizukage on April 15th, 2006 01:20 pm (UTC)
killed me! =D
[info]zalawny on April 15th, 2006 03:05 pm (UTC)
"Our hands collided, and the muffin must have been scared shitless." <--- favorite line ever. I was laughing so hard, it kinda scared me.

Totally awesome fic. Love, love the way it's narrated.
Niss[info]nissie_chan on April 18th, 2006 02:33 pm (UTC)
I heart you.

The hug came like a shock and gave me that butterfly feeling in my stomach. Ah, it's been a long time since a fic did that to me...

I swear, if you ever write a book it will be a bestseller. Your way with words is just so WOW!

Haha, I'm such a kiss-ass. Good thing your ass is kissable! XD
tatsuo hiraoka: hey baby[info]tatsuo_m on April 19th, 2006 06:02 pm (UTC)
i'm addicted to your style. not allot of people take writing fanfiction seriously. nothing felt forced. or rushed. and i'm a sucker for ambiguity. i don't believe in definite things, and your work is never definite. very world bound. real.frigging tangible. and i crave it high and lost and found and grounded. spinning loose. meaningless.meaningful. oxymoronic. true to life. true to sasuke and naruto. it almost makes the series seem AU. ^_^

god but i missed ur stuff.

more.
(Anonymous) on April 19th, 2006 07:19 pm (UTC)
OMG!
AHAHAHHAHAHAAHAH!! *can't stop laughing* naruto is so funny! Th muffin.. MUFFIN is evil! XDDDDD Sasuke's quote is funny! rofl man I cracked up!

“Uhh…” I said intelligently.

“Who the hell hugs a guy from behind? You suicidal?” he asked, arms crossed and eyebrow raised.

“Only before my morning coffee.” I grinned, and he grinned right back…ern, smirked? In a predatory way…aw, shit.


^

OMG so hilarious! please continue!


~dao
fyredevyl4: bleach[info]fyredevyl4 on April 21st, 2006 01:17 pm (UTC)
Inspiration YAY!!
You are a master storyteller and this one was absolutely hilarious. I'm glad you're able to find some inspiration for writing now. I must agree with others on the line "the muffin must have been scared shitless," as being my favorite and funny as hell.

This reminds me, will you be updating Rising Sun anytime soon? (I think that was the name...) I've followed along with all your stories on aff and some here on your website and am in all.

Keep up the fabulous work. Hope to read more soon! ^_^
Lady[info]vaysh on May 3rd, 2006 06:08 am (UTC)
af;jeaio;fhe;ajfe;oaj GAH! I was making a costume for a friend the weekend you posted this and didn't read my Friends list at all! I fail a million times over!

EEEEEEE This is AWESOME! Thank you so, so much! I seriously don't have words for how happy I am!

Can I draw you a picture?
Becca Amon[info]spiralfall on June 1st, 2006 08:23 am (UTC)
Glad you liked it! Ooo~ a picture. *_*
baka_tsu[info]baka_tsu on June 9th, 2006 12:22 am (UTC)
Really nice story, Becca. ^_^ I havent read anything by you in a while and decided to drop by to check if anything was new and found some goodies indeed. :D Keep up the awesome work as always, and I can't wait to read anything new soon! ^_^
moon_chalice[info]moon_chalice on July 15th, 2006 02:42 am (UTC)
Kawaii (...I think xp)! For some reason, the title was -really- tempting...'Muffin'...*looks for a muffin to eat, and then re-read fic* xD
 
 

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